Read the following message, then (a) analyze the strengths and weaknesses of each sentence and (b) revise the document so that it follows this chapter’s guidelines.

 Read the following message, then (a) analyze the strengths

and weaknesses of each sentence and (b) revise the document so that it follows this chapter’s guidelines.

Dear TechStar Computing:

I’m writing to you because of my disappointment with my new

multimedia PC display. The display part works all right, but the

audio volume is also set too high and the volume knob doesn’t

turn it down. It’s driving us crazy. The volume knob doesn’t seem

to be connected to anything but simply spins around. I can’t believe you would put out a product like this without testing it first.

I depend on my computer to run my small business and want

to know what you are going to do about it. This reminds me of 

every time I buy electronic equipment from what seems like any

company. Something is always wrong. I thought quality was supposed to be important, but I guess not.

Anyway, I need this fixed right away. Please tell me what you

want me to do.